she likes them to fight back in her way
your last breath should fit parameters,
maid of Prada’s best
accomplished minion, faking it of course
careful, sweets, don’t rub my shoulder
the wrong way, blade’s a’waiting
moon’s need of a beautiful new scar, one
that doesn’t contravene her
craving for perfection’s granite
face, tranquil in dimensions’ turn
careful, sweets, don’t touch this blade,
its response is pointed inward
forget me now 
Bad-ass. More of this please.
wow, i’ve always wanted someone to say that about something i wrote, really! thank you Giant!
Well, what better way to spend my short break time ? I am taking a little break from reading , and decided to once again re read your post. Shell , I know it was difficult to write , but I am happy you did. I especially enjoy the way Noxalio is intent on peeling away the layers of the onion. I was reluctant to do so in the event that I was off track. I love the organic style in which we , your readers are interacting with you and this post. Fabulous!
I played a couple of your podcasts for my neighbor Leka. He is a 23 yr. old Tall, dark and handsome , Tongan Ladies man. He was smitten by the tone of your voice and delivery. He left here Slack jawed and dreamy eyed. I have never seen him so …intrigued by a female…you have another fan in Fern Forest.The whole episode was very entertaining.
Leka was hoping that you would “Voice” this one, because he wants to listen as you say ,”Careful Sweets…”
LOL … seems i’m destined to spend another week or two hiding under this desk with embarrassment, Emilio!
anyway, please don’t ever worry about being off-track if you want to peel any of my poems – how could you be? once it floats into a reader’s private space a poem changes anyway, becomes something else altogether, which imo is what art should do, recreate itself organically, as you say
and yes, the interaction between us all here is a delight!
sooo for you and Leka i’ll voice this, though it may not be immediate … but thank you for the fit of giggles inspired by your response!
oh, the twists
and turns
and the dead
ends. whisper
and other voice
mix. diminutive
yet also vast
somewhat self
referential.
or is it? hmmm …
“ahl be bak” to
this,
often 🙂
lol noxy … your hmmmm is well on track!
i’m saying nothing more for now except that it was difficult to write but i wanted the draft off my desktop!
a fascinating, if unpleasant-ish character … but we all meet ’em in the round, yes?
i repeat, hmmm …
(and yes, we do,
but women seem to,
more often,
i think … well,
maybe …)
hmmm,
once more …
lol, Noxy .. love your hmms … they smile a lot!
crippling self’s authenticity/integrity with a need/greed to control others is such a waste of time and energy … but then they are validated when those others submit … everyone’s at a loss in such situations and karmically, stuff rebounds, often threefold *eek
Very sharp. And so wonderfully made as always.
thank you Paul … not a comfortable poem (for me) but then the character isn’t either … lol
What you allude is right on the edge, yet distinguishable .I enjoy reading material such as this. A gray area , so to speak. I have re read this one several times. Excellent post.
yes, it is an unusual area for me to stray in .. to write about … i found the half-draft on my desktop and decided to try and complete it … not my usual voice, eh? *grin .. i hope it entertained you, Emilio!