8 thoughts on “simple quiet

  1. Brad says:

    ‘Tis a lovely creation. Now I must retrieve my head from the clouds. Excuse me … see you again soon.

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    Brad … i’m not sure we ever get our heads back once the clouds get in there *grin … good to see you and thanks for such a lovely comment!

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  2. Cynthia says:

    eeeew! yumyum…i love the taste of
    this one on my tongue. how eecummings
    creative.

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    *heh …. much of my poetry is uncapped/punctuated … it’s there, of course, between the lines and reader’s breath .. readers should trust themselves more in this regard rather than depend on rules … imo … i’m thrilled that you savoured the full taste of this .. really so, as you’re an excellent writer yourself, dear lady!

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  3. Ario says:

    As ever I have little to add. There is not a word too many and there is lots of music in here. I simply enjoy reading it. I like the way it carries me higher above the everyday debris in the sky to a higher Zen plane. It’s peaceful. It reminds me of Twinkle, twinkle, little star, still my daughter’s favourite bedtime lullaby. This reads like a lullaby for adults – in a good way, I certainly don’t mean it’s sleep-inducing or anything! 🙂

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    oh wow, zen-like? thank you! i seem to have written a few complexities of late but simple, as-is-now moments are engulfing and, as you say, peaceful …
    i adore that this put you in mind of that lullaby … that was my favourite too … actually it was the only one i even liked at all lol … *prodding Ario … just checking!!

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  4. Chico Mahalo says:

    those magpies will no doubt bring your work good luck…
    reads like a right of passage…
    so economical…
    can i make you in charge of my finances?

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    *LOL … word economy is the only kind i have a grasp of .. hence i share a broken den with many cats … but we all have wonderfully glitzy flea collars! your visit is much appreciated, kind of unexpected and i feel like i should get the best crockery out .. but i lost it in a big crash …

    every day’s a rite of passage, eh?

    there’s a heavy dose of girlee wish-think going on too *grin

    thank you, Chico …

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  5. brushstrokes, you sweep us along the canvas with your words; fine craftmanship here shell. wow, i’m very impressed with how in such small words you manage to paint so much.

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    thanks, Sarah! when sky is the muse i’m not sure my words could ever do justice to the Immensity of Life and that sense of “wow, i’m soooo small compared to this” … then i realised that comparison is so NOT it … connection is … simply so …

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  6. Paul says:

    “whole heap of mad (Kerouac style)”, ring a bell? Sorry this is a comment on a previous wonderful poem not this beautiful archway one. I have been exploring linkages and stumbled across a Ms Heller who is also a fantastically wonderful poet.

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    ohhhh my, you’ve done well if you’ve found that poem! LOL … stashed on my geocities site? that i haven’t kept up with? lol ….. so much stuff on that site and poetically some of it is very …. i’ll be kind to myself and say raw, undeveloped … au naturelle perhaps *splutter …. i was pleased with “heap of mad” though …. thank you, Paul, for braving the linkage quest and for such a lovely comment!

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  7. johemmant says:

    Gorgeous….your writing is always fantastic. The alliteration in the first stanza is wonderful and then it shifts, moves into softer language…..where are you/asleep in stars is beautiful. Thanks for the lovely comment on my collaborative efforts by the way *grin*.

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    i’m glad you liked the shift … from outer noise to inner soft … and you are sooo welcome, Jo – in fact you darn well earned it! lol – what you did there in your writing is absolutely FANTASTIC!

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  8. Paul says:

    Oh so perfectly made, Shell. Draws the eye like a painting upward, across the bridge and the settling so softly at the end. Wonderfully made like a peace of jewellery art poem painting,

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    awww thank you, Paul … i’m glad you saw the movement going on here … i dunno if it’s all that great a poem, it’s more a girlee *sigh* moment *heh … but your tender comment brought me a smile and that’s always precious …

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