accolade

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it’s taken an hour to get the hang of pre-formatting text and now i can’t get font size sorted – please bear with this as is!

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gulls flock                         white and grey slow motion focus
keen sights locked on                                silver shadowed
shards of life                          gathered close in ocean skin
cold depth softened                              in the sun and calm

seized and hauled aloft                    in flight they die amazed
so much death                                      to feed gull need
flesh and blood                            so clean the beauty hurts

                     too much to be alive


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6 thoughts on “accolade

  1. I love the layout in this, it really adds to the overall power of the poem. And layout in all blog platforms is so difficult…

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    thanks Crafty Green Poet! i quite liked this poem but others never really took to it, so maybe i just have an over inflated sense of achievement here? lol

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  2. Nic says:

    I love your new set up!

    And as always, your poetry is so lovely. I’m glad you’re still writing regularly! Wonderful!

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    yayyy Nic! good to see you here! I’m glad you like the set-up and poetry too! *hugs

  3. reluctantscribe says:

    You have to tell me (well, not really of course) how you did that.

    But the layout really does the assorted imagery justice. This is really like looking at a jewel and watching it change in different light. Then there are the little details too: flock rhymes with lock but also (halfly at least) with focus.

    This is rather perfect I dare say. And no, I haven’t had any wine 🙂

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    ohhh Ario your comment made me smile … i’m really, really happy that you enjoyed this!

    It did my head in at times but i so wanted non/abstract to meet with a shared closer …

    i got the unifying “feeding frenzy” image in my head (Muse was quick off the mark with that one)but working it so the poem could be read as two (vertically) or one … or dart around at reader’s will was harder (many many dissected and reassembled drafts) …

    this may not be perfect but i think i did the best i could without tampering too much with its spirit.

    the abstract side of this describes what happens on some poetry sites (predator/prey stuff)… and my own experience with sleazy forum owners who banned me as soon as it became clear i wasn’t up for … well, you know … *shudders*

    anyway, thank you dear Ario … your post has made my day!!

  4. Shell says:

    thank you so much for your kind words, paisley … it’s grim poetry, eh? like life oftentimes …

    i’ve changed the link here so all should be well, i’m sorry you’ve had such a mangled time but hey, some of us do mangled really, really well *wry grin …

  5. whypaisley says:

    i had to change my domain name to whypaisley.com please change your links and or feed as necessary

    all you will have to do is remove the – from between why and paisley,, everything else will remain the same and will redirect you to the correct page…. sorry for the inconvenience…

  6. paisley says:

    formatting bites.. it is soooo hard,, so i know first hand how difficult this was.. i can offer no pointers,, only accolades on the vision of your verse……

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